Learning outcome number one is whether we are able to build off of multiple drafts of our work using global and local revisions. Using my Turkle essay, I was able to find. multiple spots where I appropriately built off of the ideas between my first and final draft. The first spot was in my four hundred word draft.
Here I lack to introduce the quote and I just drop in the quote. By doing so it leaves the reader not knowing where the quote was found. You can see that in my final draft I address who the quote is from.
In my final I give the reader insight about where the quote is coming from. The second place I was able to build off of my four hundred word draft is during the part where I see the other side so to speak.
While what I had written there was fine, it was not very deeply touched upon. The way in which I wrote this paragraph caused a dead end for the rest of my ideas. Instead of being a building block for my next points, it seemed to have halted the flow.
However in my final draft I was able to expand on my ideas from this paragraph and turn it into something bigger. Throughout all three of these snippets of my essay you can see how I was able to evolve areas from my first draft that I could build into a larger part of my final essay.
